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赏析六【3】曾宇的英语作文  

2008-12-13 17:26:07|  分类: Unit Five ,2008 |  标签: |举报 |字号 订阅

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赏析六【3】曾宇的英语作文 - 微微一笑 - 微微一笑的博客

My New Friend

            By Zeng Yu

Mike is my pen pal. He is my new friend,too.

He lives in England. His mother works in a school. She is a teacher. She teaches art. She usually goes to work by bike. She likes riding a bike. She thinks it’s good exercise for her health. Because it can keep her thin ,young and pretty. His father works in a hospital. His hobby is listening to music and skating on line. He often goes to work by subway. He is a super doctor. He likes helping people and playing chess with his son. Mike says he is a good father,too.      

         I have a little sister .She is only 2 years old . Mike and his brother are twins.They look the same, but they are very different. I think it’s a very funny thing. Mike likes going to school by bike, but his brother always goes to school by bus. Every evening, Mike reads storybooks,but his twin brother watches cartoons on TV.  

        I write an email to Mike every weekend.He says he is going to Changyang soon. I am very happy to have a new friend. What about you? Do you have a new friend?

赏析:

这是在学完第五单元后要求学生写的一篇作文。目的是通过练笔整和第1到第5单元所有所学内容,让学生学会自己运用所学知识去表达自己的情感,学会用英语交朋友。

1、小作者能紧紧围绕主题My Friend,写了朋友和朋友家人的职业、工作地点和上班方式,以及各自的爱好,生活习惯等。选材很好,能够达到复习和运用所学知识的目的。

2、文章采用分段分角色【his mother、mother、brother以及作者和朋友的交往】的方式写,表达层次清楚。

3、虽然是英语作文,但是文章依然很有文采。如大量使用形容词使句子显得生动形象:She thinks it’s good exercise for her health. Because it can keep her thin ,healthy and pretty. I think it’s a very funny thing. 文中还采用了对比的手法:I have a little sister .She is only 2 years old . Mike and his brother are twins. 更值得提倡的是通过变换句式表达,使得文章看起来活泼I am very happy to have a new friend. What about you? Do you have a new friend?

总之,小学生能写出这么长的英语美文,值得为他喝彩!

 

 

                                               

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